Progress Report – Nine Lives

The same procedure as every Wednesday but this is going to be a short one.

One book/screenplay: “Room” by Emma Donoghue, I’m probably reading that one with my students next year.
Two movies: The Prestige and Beerfest and I don’t regret it. The Prestige is probably my favorite Nolan movie1 and Beerfest is just really funny.

The prestige 1

Opening shot of The Prestige.

Seven pages: Well, I got stuck a bit. I kept writing and I realized that something was off and I needed to address some issues, but more on that later.
seven hours: I’m currently making notes for the new version of “Tomorrow”. I’m looking for ways to make the story more european. So far I’m glad I made that decision. I actually think that this might turn out quite well.

…later…

So, as I was churning out pages, it occurred to me that I had way too many characters to introduce. Most of my dialogue was people telling their names and I got really bored. So I decided to cut even more characters. I have to go back and adjust for that but I think it will be for the best. It’s hard for me to get rid of those characters because I have fond memories of them but the script is not supposed to be nostalgia, I want to write an entertaining movie with a message I can get behind. It hurts me to say goodbye to some friends but I can’t do justice to 6 or more people, I need to focus and that means combining some of them into one character or even spreading them around to make the remaining characters more interesting.

I already had a character cleansing a couple of month ago but I wasn’t thorough enough. I also have to make a list of some good ensemble movies to see how other writers and directors deal with a huge cast of characters. If someone has a good idea, drop it in the comments.

For now playing I’m doing something different today. I’m a huge Screen Junkies fan. They have some great contents for movie lovers and their Honest Trailers are just great.

A quick shout-out to Orlindo. He fell behind a bit due to work but he is supposed to be back this week, at least that’s what he promises. So head over and I he’s not posting this week, flood him with comments on how to make his site more popular. 🙂

  1. I love how the first frame of the movie gives away everything.

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2 Comments

  1. Namen? Sind doch egal. “Layer Cake” gibt seiner Hauptfigur keinen Namen und der hat zwei Karrieren gestartet: Matthew Vaughn und Daniel Craig. Gib jeder Figur ein Detail (“hat Erdnussallergie”) und am besten solche Details, die absolut unterschiedlich sind und bestenfalls für Konflikte sorgen können (“hat Erdnussallergie und am Ende von Akt 2 ist alles, was sie noch haben, Erdnussbutter”).

    Ansonsten solltest du eigentlich nur noch rausfinden, was ihre Funktion im Script ist, was sie der Story “geben”. Gute Ensemble-Geschichten leben davon, dass X Leute in derselben Sache X unterschiedliche Dinge sehen.

    Viel Erfolg. 🙂

  2. Ging nicht um die Namen. Es war einfach “too crowded” und brachte nicht wirklich neue Perspektiven und zwei Personen waren zu ähnlich. Hätte ich eigentlich schon lange tun sollen. Wirkt alles fokussierter jetzt.

    Aber danke für den Input, der mit der Erdnussbutter gefällt mir, wobei ich mich Frage wie heute das überhaupt essen können, Allergie hin oder her. 🙂

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